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I'm not mad.
I'm not angry
Or in your face.
I'm just sad,
Feeling crazy
And a little misplaced.

I don't belong here.
Thoughts grow thicker.
Mind is racing,
Going nowhere.
Feeling sicker--
Sick of pacing.

Back and forth,
Where am I going?
Where's my heart at?
Tired of searching for true north.
Wishing, wondering, never knowing.
Walking blindly up to bat.

Is this my life?
I feel passed by.
Seeking foolish gain
In a knife.
Bleeding out, afraid to cry--
To feel alive through my pain.

Feeling drained.
It's all a scam.
Look what I've done.
I'm ashamed
Of who I am,
And what I've become.
This is actually called Ashamed of the Girl in the Mirror, but apparently that's too long of a title. I also thought about calling it Seeking Solace, but I didn't think anyone would get that.

Anywho, this is just a short little poem I wrote last night because the first 6 lines were dancing in my mind and wouldn't let me sleep till I wrote them down. I've also become such a free verse person lately, so I wanted to write a rhymer for old times sake. I like the fact that most of them are imperfect rhymes, sorta rustic.

But yea I like this one...
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QuillOfOmega Jan 28, 2011  Student Writer
ooh im always looking forward to your poetry. its so.. deep.

The rhyming you used didn't seem rhymy, but it gave it your poem a beat... or flow... or movement.

Yeah... movement through your thoughts.
Thank you so much, you make me feel important :huggle:

Yea, I wanted the rhyme to be a bit off, that was intentional, I think it's because I've grown to like free verse so much lately...

Anyway, thanks so much again, always nice to have another's input :D
QuillOfOmega Jan 30, 2011  Student Writer
yeah, i knew the rhyming style was intentional. I almost never rhyme in my poetry, because rhyming restricts your vocabulary and "to restrict your vocabulary is to restrict your imagination" (English teacher said that all the time)

haha funny

I do however like the face that when you write rhymers you have to really think about your wording. When I used to write only rhymers I would take a couple hours to write stuff because getting it to sound justright took time and it made me think about rhyming and communcating a feeling.

Anyway, very interesting... ;)
XVinfeX Jan 28, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Ugh I hate it when that happens. Thats like every night for me but I'm to lazy to get up and do something about it so I end up forgetting xD

I like this one as well man good job :D
XVinfeX Jan 28, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
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